Nobody truly understood
To them it was all unknown.
That our past can never be let go,
For the future,
Is set in stone.
I remember the days
When it was just you and I.
It was only two of us,
And we never had to ask why.
But we were crossing a path
That was new in our minds.
And we were searching for something
That we never could find.
Another mistake we had to make,
Sorrow flew into our souls.
Robbing us of all our memories,
Leaving our hearts as empty holes.
It was the day everything changed,
It was then we realized
We would never be the same.
A memory that I still kept was you,
Looking into my brown eyes,
You had called them liquid pools.
We had sat and remembered the days
When we were such fools.
Now all is done,
But how to explain the truth?
There is only one way:
There was me,
And there was you.
22 comments:
i wont comment............you know what i think.
Um, no I don't.
Seriously...what are you talking about?
o bela.........................
What?
The second-to-last stanza kind of strays from the structure of the rest of the poem, but otherwise it's good.
Ah, Bela... always so profound!
look at my comment on the previous poem. you'll get it then.
Personally, I think that mistakes is an inadequate name to call this poem. Reminisce? Something more along the lines of something happier. It just kind of shouts that to me (Oxymoron?) Anyway my personal opinion
~A
Maria - Throughout the poem, it's almost as if when I looked back, I couldn't remember anything. So if I were to keep one memory...well, that creates the second stanza.
I'm going to look, Maddie!
Yay! I'm so glad you commented, Andrew! Reminisce would be a good title! I was going for Mistakes because this poem is supposed to be like a journey between two people. And within every stanza there is a mistake made. Especially in the second to last stanza!
Thanks so much for your comments!!!
your mistake was writing this......
jkjk
You're cruel.
no, i am kind. i just like to have fun with you.
Save it for the luchbreak, Maddie.
I have plenty more, don't worry.
Lucky me.
i thought you'd be pleased!
Oh I'm so pleased. On the inside!
i bet you are!!!!!!!!!
(said in a pleased almost snotty manner)
Okay, then...
A brown cat walked into a blue house. Suddenly, they both noticed a yellow fly sitting on a wall and decided to attack. How many peppers were harmed?
I'm confused.
Just doing my part to deviate the conversation from discussing the snottiness of being pleased.
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