Tuesday, July 15, 2008

Truth

If I saw you in a crowded room
you'd be the one I'd see.
If I were to dream one night
It would be of you and me.

I know what they say
about love
is untrue.
But since we've met
I can only think of you.

You're the one and only
thing in my life that's real.
I'm begging, please.
Let me tell you how I feel.

13 comments:

Andrew said...

Hmm.... another deep poem. This is really good. I like the perspective of the person and how they see the other one from "across the room". I liked the last stanza, it's kind of Casablanca-esque. Good one Bela,
Keep up the good work (^_^)

~A

P.S~ FIRST

Pirate Queen said...

deep, love it

Bela said...

Thanks to both of you! This actually started off as a song before I edited it...
What does FIRST mean?

Gina said...

Don't take this the wrong way, but I kind of thought that parts of thr last stanza were a bit redundant, considering that you just told the person exactly how you felt for the past eight lines; in fact, to me the poem makes complete sense without it. This reminds me of the two poems Maria and I read at our cousin's wedding, in that they both have a very traditional rhyme scheme and rhythm and use general descriptions.

"I Will Love You Forever

I love you so deeply,
I love you so much,
I love the sound of your voice
And the way that we touch.
I love your warm smile
And your kind, thoughtful way,
The joy that you bring
To my life every day.
I love you today
As I have from the start,
And I'll love you forever
With all of my heart."


-- Amanda Nicole Martinez -

Andrew, I'm confused when you say the last line reminds you of Casablanca. I've only seen it once so I don't know it very well, but I'm having trouble thinking of the reason why you made that connection... By the way- Casablanca-esque is a cool word, heehee.

Bela said...

Quit flirting Gina...
Just kidding!
Oh, and I now understand what he meant by 1st. I'm feeling kind of dumb right about now.

Gina said...

That song we heard today is starting to influence my brain.




Just kidding. I just decided that I should quote random stuff at least as much and Andrew and Maria.

Bela said...

I'm sorry, are you talking about "I Kissed A Girl"? Please tell me you're not...

Kenzie/Noodle said...

I like how this rymes. i know i probably spell rymes wrong. i have spelling issues.

Bela said...

Thanks Nood!

Bela said...

And Rhymes is spelled like that.
(See the way I spelled it)

Gina said...

When I say I was kidding, I do mean that there was no seriousness implied to my sarcastic comment. It was supposed to be funny, but I guess not... Some people just don't appreciate cerebral humor. Gosh.

Kenzie/Noodle said...

thnx you. Rhymes!!! yes i spelled it right

Bela said...

It's a new age, Gina.
Just kidding...
And you're welcome Nood!