Look in the mirror.
Tell me what you see.
Are you staring at a stranger?
Or are you staring back at me?
You lost yourself,
when you looked away.
You searched for your face,
but you were led astray.
You sat, you wondered.
But only questions came.
In the midst of it all,
you only found more shame.
No pain, no gain.
No trust, no love.
What goes around comes around.
Haven't you had enough?
Tell me what you see.
Are you staring at a stranger?
Or are you staring back at me?
You lost yourself,
when you looked away.
You searched for your face,
but you were led astray.
You sat, you wondered.
But only questions came.
In the midst of it all,
you only found more shame.
No pain, no gain.
No trust, no love.
What goes around comes around.
Haven't you had enough?
14 comments:
I think your last stanza is fine. Just please, PLEASE take out the comma between "goes around, comes around". It is not needed and TOTALLY bugs me!
The images this produced in my mind reminded me of that horror flick that was released a little while ago, "Mirrors" or some such title.
This seems like a return to more of your earlier stuff, way back in the archives of this blog.
Here's a fun thing to do: Memorize some of your rhyming poems, then have a rap battle with an unsuspecting rapper who takes your poems as insults.
Or not.
By the way... I'm tired today because my uncle and my cousin made Maria and me stay up until 1:30 AM last night to watch the movie version of Sense and Sensibility. FINALLY I know what Jane Austen is all about; no one ever bothers to tell you what she is because they hold her work so sacredly.
Okay, the comma is deleted!
Hmm...strange. Could it be that I'm repeating certain emotions, but the cause has differed? An interesting observation, Gina!
Haha! I actually laughed when I read that last part! Maybe I'll do that...
Or not.
Maybe that's what she is? Perhaps holding onto her work is a way to say she is careful with how close she lets the world come. Or something like that...
Oh wait. Never mind. That sounded stupid...
Here's the challenge:
Write a 2-page poem (rhyming or nonrhyming) that follows the story of an old man, using ONLY this list of words:
http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/Appendix:Basic_English_word_list
Okay...can I use any words like a, and, the, etc.?
Yes, but only when needed.
And how much time do I have? Think carefully here...
How about 3 weeks?
Fair enough.
I accept! ***!!!GONG!!!***
All right, jump on it then!
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Oddly enough, my Word Verification word today is "prose". :)
LET THE CHALLENGE.... BEGINNNNN!!!!!
HUZZAH! I'll have it for you by morning.
No, I'm completely kidding. How does...two months sound? =P
(Next week.)
Well, if you have nothing else to do, I guess... :)
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Word Verification: pretsta, which is not quite the same as "presto", but you can't always win. :)
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