Sunday, January 11, 2009

Changing Me

Second chances don't matter
when people choose not to change.
The truth hides in their eyes,
but it's constantly rearranged.

It's hanging on their tongues,
it's lying on their backs.
The burden they choose to carry
will bring about the courage they lack.

You've tried so hard,
but you have failed to change me.
Keep your eyes open for now
and maybe you'll find the key.

But for now stay in your corner
and continue to slip through the cracks.
But when you turn your back to me,
remember there's no turning back.


Gina said...

Great opening line: "Second chances don't matter when people choose not to change." That could be on a calendar, or something like that. :)

You're mad at someone... it is unclear whether this person has chosen the path they have taken (see opening 2 lines) or if they have had the choice made for them (last stanza).

There's also an element of false courage (2nd stanza) which I find interesting- is the person being emboldened by their actions?

Very important, too, is the forgiveness implied in the 3rd stanza, where you encouraged the person to "keep [their] eyes open for now and maybe [they]'ll find the key". So you're not sure if you want to stay mad at this person; my feeling is that you would be uncomfortable with remaining angry with this person.

As for this person's identity, I can only assume a friend (or ex-friend) of some sort is slipping to the "dark side".

Maria said...

New poem yay!

(I'm supposed to be doing an English project......)

Word Ver: growboyc
heehee :)

Maria said...

time for a nice nap b4 school...

Bela said...

Thanks for the comments! Hey, I'm sorry I haven't been on lately. It's been pretty hectic lately. :)

I kind of threw this poem together last minute. I don't know, I find it kind of choppy.

Very nice analysis, Gina it is completely true. Put it all together, and what do you get? Haha!

You nap before school, Maria? Strange, but then again, so am I. :)

Gina said...

Put it all together and ya get a big fat mess. Just kidding :)

What I get is that you are confused about what you want, for yourself and the other person.

Maria said...

The napping before school comment happened when I was up till like 4 in the morning doing an English project. I got 1 1/2 hours of sleep that nigh-- morning, so I basically woke up dead and stayed home. :)

Word Ver: insubmer
Sounds Latin. As in the language.