secrete the beauty of immortality,
burning the reflection of
unbound power
into memory.
Desire drifts
from heart to mind,
fearful incandescence escaping
from fragmented chains.
Suffocating ignorance
cloaks reality
as blind consciousness
dominates moral prevalence.
Staggered insanity
lingers behind the vanity
of a shattered looking glass,
malignant distress haunting
the eyes of a child.
Adolescence battles resilience,
each affliction wounding
the heart of a warrior;
a persistent trial.
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Hmmm...so I'm going to continue with the train of thought that you hate and say that your poems lately are sort of lists of metaphorical images. Here is what I think each of them means:
"Intertwining rhythms
secrete the beauty of immortality,
burning the reflection of
unbound power into memory."
This is talking about your love of music and your belief that it can tell the truth above all things. It also speaks of the powerful emotional connection we all (well, musicians anyway) have with music.
"Desire drifts
from heart to mind,
fearful incandescence escaping
from fragmented chains."
The most important part about this, to me, is the idea of desire being transformed into a "fearful" light, as if we are afraid of what we want. (...or something like that...)
"Suffocating ignorance
cloaks reality
as blind consciousness
dominates moral prevalence."
So...if desire can be turned into reality, it would follow that cloaking it would make one's consciousness blind, because there would be no light to help one see... (okay, now this is just getting silly.)
"Staggered insanity
lingers behind the vanity
of a shattered looking glass,
malignant distress haunting
the eyes of a child."
See, this one gave me some pause while reading it for the first time because I couldn't decide whether you meant to make the ends of the lines rhyme or not. Anyway...this one is perhaps the most interesting image. It was interesting that you should say "looking glass" instead of "mirror", especially since I've been thinking of Alice so much lately. I pictured a person from the looking glass world looking out as their world was shattered as a small child looked on in helpless horror. (Pleasant.)
"Adolescence battles resilience,
each affliction wounding
the heart of a warrior;
a persistent trial."
Ah, yes. Life is a war. Haven't heard that one before....just kidding. ANYway, the idea of adolescence as something so necessarily trying and evil is interesting, so that for each person it is them versus the adolescence, which ends up hurting them anyway, although they come out all right in the end. Or so I see it. Perhaps this is the "Delicae Rivalry" of the title? Or did you just pick that title for no reason?
There. This comment is 379 words long. Happy?
So close! Rhythms, meaning patterns. Aka: routine. Immortality, meaning an ongoing _________. This can be trial, relationship, situation, anything. Power, meaning the power one has over another.
Desire can be described as the "desire to be as the past", or the need to return to the way things were. Incandescence: a phenomenon of some kind (fearful, self explanatory), escaping from the binds that held it back.
Suffocating ignorance: ignorance that has been smothered under whatever has held it back and stopped it from being revealed. (Cloaking reality: once ignorance emerges, it blinds the narrator from seeing the truth, etc.) Blind consciousness: being involved in a situation without actually having your mind on it, dominating moral prevalence because it stops one from halting wrongs.
Oh, I didn't mean to make that rhyme...oopsies :) Well, the vanity in a broken looking glass is simple. You have the looking glass, it is useless, and yet you still have it. Why? The vanity of possession. Think about the first line of that stanza and let me know what you come up with!
(Clearly, it would be the harmful distress that "haunts" (exists, but isn't spoken of/known of to others) a child's eyes relates to the first line. The child is the subject of the insanity. Somewhat of a dark image, entrapment within fear of difference perhaps?) Play around with that :)
YOU GOT THE LAST PART RIGHT! Also, YAY! Thanks for the comment :) I still expect you to respond...thanks and come again! Haha, how I love to patronize you...
AND something you MUST remember is that I almost always incorporate a story or journey of some kind in my poems. And the main goal is to try and bring about a certain emotion, or have an overall emotion :)
So there's more than one interpretation. That one's mine. :P
But seriously, I was thinking some of the things you said but I decided not to say them because I thought they were too obvious. I wanted to give you the perspective that is most clearly mine and not something that someone else could write. Does that make sense?
Indeed it does, and that is EXACTLY what my writing is all about! My perspective is different from another, and yours was definitely unexpected, but you got the general idea which is fantastic :)
Hooray for being fantastic! :D haha. I'm reading for English right now.... ever read it?
...when I typed that it included the title of the book ("Of Mice and Men")
Read it far too many times, my friend. far too many...so sad, though!
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