tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4085540941293420499.post5638136082384324561..comments2023-09-04T05:56:54.694-07:00Comments on Heart on Paper: Hollow ThoughtsBelahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03972018516179552839noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4085540941293420499.post-40364277489859566992010-08-27T20:51:20.793-07:002010-08-27T20:51:20.793-07:00Wow, thanks so much! That's an incredible expl...Wow, thanks so much! That's an incredible explanation, very deep - and also exactly the reaction I was looking for.<br /><br />Thank you!Belahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03972018516179552839noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4085540941293420499.post-87405667776912931972010-08-27T17:12:10.993-07:002010-08-27T17:12:10.993-07:00"Thoughts struggle to break free of marrow ca..."Thoughts struggle to break free of marrow cages, bones crushing to dust under a vacant frame." ------Wonderful. Such a powerful image of self-destruction from mistake, wordlessness capturing your being.<br /><br />Excellent.T.A. Chancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425087842116246380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4085540941293420499.post-23062137012046052232010-08-24T21:27:49.810-07:002010-08-24T21:27:49.810-07:00I missed you!
Well, the line "Lesson by less...I missed you!<br /><br />Well, the line "Lesson by lesson" can reflect any relationship, seeing as lessons are learned each day...but in this case, yes, it was aimed towards a certain person in my life.<br /><br />I like the idea of switching the ending...my original thought was to play out the thought process, post-event...but I think keeping the theme would bring a lot more balance toBelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03972018516179552839noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4085540941293420499.post-82294945916329713622010-08-24T18:50:50.455-07:002010-08-24T18:50:50.455-07:00(sorry this took me so long!)
What I like about t...(sorry this took me so long!)<br /><br />What I like about this poem is the repetition of different images that add to the idea of hollowness. Everything seemed very fragile and on the verge of breaking. If you really wanted to, it might be even stronger to switch up the last few lines so that they reflect hollowness more than aloneness.<br /><br />The word choice of "lesson by lesson"Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07481111584970132557noreply@blogger.com